Could be a typo, or could be *le gasp* A Genuine Error! But, I'm pretty sure it's Fugaku, instead of Fugaki.
Sasuke feels like he is looking at a Van Gogh painting, all yellow sunflowers and blue, blue sky. Maybe it's that I like Van Gogh so much, or maybe it's my poorly-hidden sunflower fixation, but yes I like this line a lot.
AHAHA, Naruto as an FBI agent? (And I love the long description of just how blue his eyes are.)
He snorts under his breath and hopes that smile is never directed at him. The carpets are quite thick and it’ll be a proper nuisance to get the nosebleed out of them. Yeah. This, too. <3
He sees Uzumaki’s eyes dart between Sasuke and Sakura and knows he’s picked up on their connection. Because Naruto is excellent with people. I love this detail, as well.
On the one hand, I was always a Sakura supporter when it came down to Ino vs. Sakura. On the other hand, I kind of love your Ino like mad. <3 (Plus, you went outside the typical Team 7 AU dynamic, which is nice to see--the boys still love Sakura, but since Ino happened to be closer, too, Sasuke got close to her instead.)
So he keeps Ino by his side and tries not to be too much of a bastard to her. AHAHAHA. <3
Is it bad that the first time I read "biomedical research corporation" I thought "MAD SCIENCE, AHAHAHA"? Because I totally did. >.>
Now, could we start with this scientist, Orochimaru Sannin? And the first thing I imagined here was Kabuto and Orochimaru doing this for the purpose of having a child, rather than, y'know, for cash and because they're both sekritly mad scientists. (Plus, Orochimaru working for Sasuke. Ahaha. <3) This idea was further corroborated by: Orochimaru Sannin and Kabuto Yakushi. What are you two up to? XD
Criticism: "He eyes Kakashi from the corner of his eye." Redundancy! Not actually a real error, but sounds funny. D:
As Sasuke had come closer Naruto had noticed that Sasuke was taller than him by two inches at least. BUT NO MORE. XD
Naruto considers punching Sasuke for the arrogant attitude, but that may be seen as unprofessional in a certain light ...♥
I'm probably quoting too much back at you, but still. I love this line a lot: He has never been completely submissive; the more someone pushes at him, the more he pushes back – it is the only way to survive in his world. Partly because I'm totally of the opinion that Sasuke should bottom, and this makes me think the other way is totally worth reading, but also because of the sort of throwaway reference to the fact that Naruto's life was probably not all rainbows and unicorns prior to joining the FBI.
Sasuke still has no idea why Orochimaru has stolen that particular project because he and Kabuto can't have butt-babies without it. There. Fixed it for you. :D (What's really weird is I'm slightly squicked by this ship.)
Yay! Itachilove. Combined with not wanting to associate with the Uchiha! <3
D: Your porn! I wish I could write that well! XD
“So, I have thought of something for the bait,” Sasuke says calmly, and they discuss specifics for the rest of breakfast. Subjext change! Totally not sexy! (But, admittedly, very in character. XD)
Eventually I'm sure I'll think of a better way to show that I really like a line, but as it is, I will continue to parrot your work back at you. <3 and is aiming to tire himself into a paperwork-induced coma. (pffft. paperwork-induced coma. XD Look at my witty comment!)
put your hands of your head Legitimate concern, as opposed to needless flailing and giggling: "of"?
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Date: 2010-03-05 11:24 pm (UTC)Sasuke feels like he is looking at a Van Gogh painting, all yellow sunflowers and blue, blue sky. Maybe it's that I like Van Gogh so much, or maybe it's my poorly-hidden sunflower fixation, but yes I like this line a lot.
AHAHA, Naruto as an FBI agent? (And I love the long description of just how blue his eyes are.)
He snorts under his breath and hopes that smile is never directed at him. The carpets are quite thick and it’ll be a proper nuisance to get the nosebleed out of them. Yeah. This, too. <3
He sees Uzumaki’s eyes dart between Sasuke and Sakura and knows he’s picked up on their connection. Because Naruto is excellent with people. I love this detail, as well.
On the one hand, I was always a Sakura supporter when it came down to Ino vs. Sakura. On the other hand, I kind of love your Ino like mad. <3 (Plus, you went outside the typical Team 7 AU dynamic, which is nice to see--the boys still love Sakura, but since Ino happened to be closer, too, Sasuke got close to her instead.)
So he keeps Ino by his side and tries not to be too much of a bastard to her. AHAHAHA. <3
Is it bad that the first time I read "biomedical research corporation" I thought "MAD SCIENCE, AHAHAHA"? Because I totally did. >.>
Now, could we start with this scientist, Orochimaru Sannin? And the first thing I imagined here was Kabuto and Orochimaru doing this for the purpose of having a child, rather than, y'know, for cash and because they're both sekritly mad scientists. (Plus, Orochimaru working for Sasuke. Ahaha. <3) This idea was further corroborated by: Orochimaru Sannin and Kabuto Yakushi. What are you two up to? XD
Criticism: "He eyes Kakashi from the corner of his eye." Redundancy! Not actually a real error, but sounds funny. D:
As Sasuke had come closer Naruto had noticed that Sasuke was taller than him by two inches at least. BUT NO MORE. XD
Naruto considers punching Sasuke for the arrogant attitude, but that may be seen as unprofessional in a certain light ...♥
I'm probably quoting too much back at you, but still. I love this line a lot: He has never been completely submissive; the more someone pushes at him, the more he pushes back – it is the only way to survive in his world. Partly because I'm totally of the opinion that Sasuke should bottom, and this makes me think the other way is totally worth reading, but also because of the sort of throwaway reference to the fact that Naruto's life was probably not all rainbows and unicorns prior to joining the FBI.
Sasuke still has no idea whyOrochimaru has stolen that particular project because he and Kabuto can't have butt-babies without it. There. Fixed it for you. :D (What's really weird is I'm slightly squicked by this ship.)Yay! Itachilove. Combined with not wanting to associate with the Uchiha! <3
D: Your porn! I wish I could write that well! XD
“So, I have thought of something for the bait,” Sasuke says calmly, and they discuss specifics for the rest of breakfast. Subjext change! Totally not sexy! (But, admittedly, very in character. XD)
Eventually I'm sure I'll think of a better way to show that I really like a line, but as it is, I will continue to parrot your work back at you. <3 and is aiming to tire himself into a paperwork-induced coma. (pffft. paperwork-induced coma. XD Look at my witty comment!)
put your hands of your head Legitimate concern, as opposed to needless flailing and giggling: "of"?