Oh god, that comment is so much longer than I planned. XD BUT THAT'S NOT ALL!
Biosciences okay, I'm totally nit-picking now, but if there's not a reason for this to be capitalized (like, say, it being the company name?) I think it should be the company name. Only, change it to BioSCIENCE! Exclamation point totally necessary. XD (Actually, that wouldn't be very Uchiha, would it? D:)
And, the rest of it--I totally stopped quoting things, because all the throwaway lines about banter and Sasuke yelling at Naruto to shut up and let his body heal because he got shot (which I also loved--not the getting shot, but the pushing Sasuke out of the way, then going "Oh" when he realized he had been hit, not Sasuke). Plus! You made Orochimaru the villain! That might have seemed so boring back when Orochimaru was the villain, but since I've about had it with Madara, it was a refreshing change. <3
Okay, I'm done now. >.> Anyway, the TL;DR version is I LIKED IT A LOT, WRITE MOAR. :3
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Date: 2010-03-05 11:26 pm (UTC)Biosciences okay, I'm totally nit-picking now, but if there's not a reason for this to be capitalized (like, say, it being the company name?) I think it should be the company name. Only, change it to BioSCIENCE! Exclamation point totally necessary. XD (Actually, that wouldn't be very Uchiha, would it? D:)
And, the rest of it--I totally stopped quoting things, because all the throwaway lines about banter and Sasuke yelling at Naruto to shut up and let his body heal because he got shot (which I also loved--not the getting shot, but the pushing Sasuke out of the way, then going "Oh" when he realized he had been hit, not Sasuke). Plus! You made Orochimaru the villain! That might have seemed so boring back when Orochimaru was the villain, but since I've about had it with Madara, it was a refreshing change. <3
Okay, I'm done now. >.> Anyway, the TL;DR version is I LIKED IT A LOT, WRITE MOAR. :3